I would consider this response essay to have some of the main components, for example, summary and personal experience however, the authors most important ideas are not different from the writer chosing one specific idea and sticking with it. The writers lack of organization and grammar also makes the essay hard to understand. So in my opinion the writer fell a little short.
The writer starts off with a summary of the article. This summary is well written and their ideas are clear. The writer then goes into the author’s main idea. Again she is clear in stating that advertisement is taking over people’s lives. The writer then goes into her idea without starting a new paragraph, so its hard to tell if the writers is still discussing the author’s idea or their own.
The writer essentially tries their best to get their point across however, however because the essay is not organized well, it hard to really understand what the writing is saying. For example, In the first paragraph the writer has a summary, an experience, and back to the main point. In paragraph two, the writer talks about how media is sending a contradicting message. In the third paragraph, the writer tries to summarize all the ideas together in one sentence.
What I think would have made this essay a definite pass, is if the writer would have organized their thoughts better. They had good ideas, but it lacked organization leaving the reader a little unclear about what they think about advertisement.
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