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I would consider this response essay to have some of the main components, for example, summary and personal experience however, the authors most important ideas are not different from the writer chosing one specific idea and sticking with it. The writers lack of organization and grammar also makes the essay hard to understand. So in my opinion the writer fell a little short.

The writer starts off with a summary of the article. This summary is well written and their ideas are clear. The writer then goes into the author’s main idea. Again she is clear in stating that advertisement is taking over people’s lives. The writer then goes into her idea without starting a new paragraph, so its hard to tell if the writers is still discussing the author’s idea or their own.

The writer essentially tries their best to get their point across however, however because the essay is not organized well, it hard to really understand what the writing is saying. For example, In the first paragraph the writer has a summary, an experience, and back to the main point. In paragraph two, the writer talks about how media is sending a contradicting message. In the third paragraph, the writer tries to summarize all the ideas together in one sentence.

What I think would have made this essay a definite pass, is if the writer would have organized their thoughts better. They had good ideas, but it lacked organization leaving the reader a little unclear about what they think about advertisement.

Where am I now with Sondra Perl?

After completing my first essay on Sondra Perl, I was left a little confused about her ideas on retrospective Structuring and Felt Sense. However, after reading it again and discussing it in class, I must say that I have a pretty good idea about the components of felt sense and retrospective structuring. Retrospective structuring is a process in which you take the ideas that are floating around in your head and apply them to paper in a structured and organized form. For example, if Elizabeth had to write a paper about dogs, she would probably be thinking about all her experiences with dogs. She will then organize those thoughts and structure them in a way that makes sense. Once she has written a couple of sentences, she rereads her work to see if she wrote down what she intended to say. This process of retrospective structuring also calls upon the use of felt sense; they work together making sure the structure is correct and the actual feeling you wanted to project is correct. The other part of this trio is called projective structuring. While felt sense and retrospective structuring are working hand and hand, projective structuring comes into the equation to put yourself into the audiences shoes. Not focusing on the correctness of the piece, but focusing on another perspective (the audiences perspective). The process of projective structuring will enable you, as the writer to identify all the things that you noticed while reading other works. It enables you to look your work and include positive and avoid negative writing techniques in your work.
Retrospective structuring, felt sense, and projective structuring work together in order to compose a piece that is intelligible to others, that is what you want to say, and that takes your audience into perspective. Although, this process may sound like that’s all you need in order write a perfect paper, it is not. As writers, we must remember that writing is a recursive process and even after you have written the first draft, you have to go back , revise, rewrite, edit and/or scrap what you felt was not needed.

"Tutoring Do's and Don'ts"

“Tutoring Do’s and Don’ts”
When tutoring a student there are things that a tutor should and should not do when in session.

“Tutoring Do’s”

1.Be Ready – A tutor should be ready to pay close attention to their tutee.
2.Be Attentive – A tutor should be alert, focused and be willing to address the needs of the tutee.
3.Be on Aware—A tutor should be aware of the messages that they are giving.
4.Be Relaxed
5.Look Approachable
6.Help the student to create ideas and images on their own by asking open ended questions.
7.Establish eye contact
8.Realize that each tutee is different and give the tutee that individual help that is needed
9.Realize that talking is a major part of the writing process – It will help the tutee develop and create ideas on their own.
10.Its okay to play dumb at times.
11.Praise the tutee when you deem it right to do so.
12.Be Honest
13.Be Positive

Tutoring Don’t’s

1.Posture is very important so a tutor should not:
a.Fold their arms
b.Looking everywhere else , except for in the tutee direction
c.Taking a phone call
d.Looking at your clock or watch
e.Yawning
f.Fidgeting
g.Doodling
h.Drumming fingers
i.Tapping a pen
j.Be too relaxed
k.Be too anxious
2.Slouch
3.Tone of voice should not be to harsh or to warm.
4.Act as if you have something else more important.
5.Do not write the paper or assignment for them.
6.Don’t Act as if you are the expert.
7.Don’t develop a personal relationship during the tutoring session
8.Don’t be late.
9.Don’t be a therapist
10.Don’t Correct errors unless that is the only thing wrong with the paper and if you are qualified to make corrections.
11.Don’t be a cheerleader, praising him or her for every single thing.